topic about a doctor and inventor

  • Young people come across the necessity of choosing their future profession making this topic of current interest.Some people claim that the profession of a doctor is more essential than the profession of an inventor. I support the opposite point of view. A creative person benefits more than a doctor to some countries , however, the profession of a doctor is of great importance too.

  • спасибо . Можно вставить это Making this topic of current interest Да можно переписать так
    A majority of youngsters have faced a professional's choice , making this topic of current interest. Some people claim that the profession of a doctor is more essential than the profession of an inventor . From my perspective, I agree with the opposite point of view, a creative person yields more benefits rather than a doctor in any society of a peaceful country, however, the profession of a doctor is of great importance.

  • Профессиональный выбор --это не выбор профессии, поэтому поменяла все. И предлоги поменяла, не видите? И peaceful country --бессмысленно., если имеется в виду the country which is not in the state of war

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  • Спасибо Да вижу все Ваши предложения профессиональны. Мне кажется запятая перед making Или я ошибаюсь

  • It seems undeniable that the challenging world reveals global ongoing issues which( requires --require )close attention. The main issues such as global warming, a natural resources crisis, population growth force people TO (seriously react to the necessity of recreation of attitude?----что имели в виду? ) to the surrounding environment, to consuming raw materials. According to ?------having these problems, it is obvious that creative specialists will be in demand, resulting in the increase in the demands for approaches concerning the conserve minerals ?что хотели сказать a s well as the equipment decreasing pollution. By? To implement these ideas, it is reasonable to develop technological industry? Может наооборот?industrial technology . It is the right solution because, for instance, using the Internet, the printing productions have been significantly reduced during the last two decades since people have been opting for online reading. Consequently, the deforestation’s scale is less compared to the past. As a result, modern world exposes acute problems, related to these issues , it would BE fair to conclude that a creator ?эiто кто, Господь? is more crucial вряд ли о человеке так можно in any peaceful society.

  • Делите на меньшие предложения, читать очень сложно. Поделила, смотрите.

  • Кстати, только три глагола (в значении приносить, а не получать выгоду) возможны с сущ, benefit --bring, provide, offer.

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  • понятно значит yield нельзя в том предложении нужно bring

  • Спасибо Может так
    It seems undeniable that the challenging world reveals global ongoing issues which require close attention.
    The main issues such as the global warming, a natural resources crisis, the population growth, force people seriously change their attitude to the surrounding environment, to consuming raw materials.
    According to having these problems, it is obvious that creative specialists will be in demand, because it necessitate to search new approaches which will allow to conserve minerals as well as to invent special equipments decreasing pollutions.
    To implement these ideas, it is reasonable to develop technological industry . . It is the right solution because, for instance, using the Internet, the printing productions have been significantly reduced during the last two decades, since people have been opting for online reading.Consequently, the deforestation’s scale is less compared to the past. As a result, the modern world exposes the acute problems, for solving them, are needed creators.Thus , it would be fair to conclude that a creator will bring more profits to any society.

  • Можно ошибаться. Это все никто не будет проверять. Я пишу чтобы улучшить свой writing

  • Force to, according здесь не лепится, заменила на having, it necessitate? А почему минералы надо conserve? Pollution -неисчисл, во мн числе не может быть,то же самое с equipment --я для кого это писала?про зпт не спрашивайте, пишу с планшета. Тут о них хорошо написано.
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    are needed creators.--а это еще что?не русский же.

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    raw materials synonim -- natural resources Это эквивалентно написать conserve natural resources
    It seems undeniable that the challenging world reveals global ongoing issues which require close attention.
    The main issues such as the global warming, a natural resources crisis, the population growth, force people seriously to change their attitude to the surrounding environment, to consuming raw materials.
    Having these problems, it is obvious that creative specialists will be in demand, because it necessitate to search new approaches which will allow to conserve minerals as well as to invent special equipment, decreasing pollution.
    To implement these ideas, it is reasonable to develop technological industry . It is the right solution because, for instance, using the Internet, the printing productions have been significantly reduced during the last two decades, since people have been opting for online reading. Consequently, the deforestation’s scale is less compared to the past. As a result, the modern world exposes the acute problems, for solving them, creative persons are necessary. Thus , it would be fair to conclude that a creator will bring more profits to any society.
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