topic about a doctor and inventor
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# vilidator
Hi
Could you point out mistakes in my essay, please
Thanks
A majority of youngsters have faced a professional's choice , making this question is acute to considers. Some people claim that the profession of a doctor is more essential than the profession of an inventor. From my perspective, probably, I agree with the opposite point of view, a creative person in large measure yields benefits than a doctor in peaceful countries, however, a doctor has the valuable meaning .
It seems undeniable that the challenging world reveals global ongoing issues which requires close attention, the main issues such as the global warming, a natural resources crisis, the population growth force people seriously react to the necessity of recreation of attitude to the surrounding environment, to consuming raw materials. According to these problems, it is obvious that creative specialists will be in demand, resulting in an increase in the demands for approaches which conserve minerals as well as equipments decreasing pollutions. By implementing these ideas, it is reasonable to develop technological industry. It , in reality , is the right solution because, for instance, last two decades, by using the Internet, the printing productions have been significantly reduced, since people have been opting for online reading, consequently, the deforestation’s scale is less compared to the past. As a result, the modern world exposes the acute problems, related to these issues , it would fair to conclude that a creator is more crucial in any peaceful society.
It is worth remarking that any society has to develop medicine, because new diseases emerge , and new drugs has to combat them, eradicating their existence. The medical professionals who are approved , honed skills are necessary to cure disease, maintain health well-being of population, because a sick person is not able to be creative. Therefore, any community reaps advantage by having doctors.
In conclusion, instead of using conventional methods of saving natural resources, environment, people have to invert new methods , approaches, to increase the productivity of devises which preserve environment. Thus, an inventor brings more merits than a doctor, nevertheless, a doctor also plays vital role. -
# Vera
Ну, прежде всего, изобретатель --не профессия. Много ошибок по согласованию глагола с подлежащим,типа new drugs has? to combat them, некоторые места непонятны по смыслу: making this question is acute to considers. ?in large measure ?
Куски списаны с ошибками devises? Сверьте с тем, откуда списывали. -
# vilidator
Thanks Я писала сама текст, не переписывала.
new drugs has да нужно new drugs have
to combat them - не знаю как переписать по другому
making this question is acute to considers --наверное нужно making this question is acute to consider Может как-то по другому
in large measure
Не знаю как правильно написать это предложения В условии задачи нужно указать кто важнее доктор или изобретатель Нельзя использовать простые слова important Может быть мне переписать это предложения
I agree with the opposite point of view, a creative person in large measure yields benefits than a doctor in peaceful countries
как следующее
I agree with the opposite point of view, from my perspective, inventers are more valuable rather than doctors in peaceful countries
Мне кажется сильно просто как-то .Нужно чтобы не простые предложения были. Первоначальное лучше. Возможно в нем ошибки.
devises - да нужно devices
Задача в том что каждое предложения должно быть не простым
Спасибо большое -
# Vera
Если хотите и есть время, выкладывайте переделанное по кусочкам и ниже ,если есть ошибки, я спрошу, что вы имели в виду по -русски.итак, первый
A majority of youngsters have faced a professional's choice , making this question (is acute to considers)переведите, что хотите сказать . Some people claim that the profession of a doctor is more essential than the profession of an inventor. (From my perspective,----I believe ) probably, I agree with the opposite point of view, a creative person (in large measure----on a large scale) yields benefits than a doctor in peaceful countries, however, a doctor (has the valuable meaning .?---the profession of a doctor is of great importance ) -
# vilidator
Спасибо Топик который я писала был такой
Inventors are not as important to society as doctors. To what extent do you agree with this statement.
Пытаюсь доказать что inventer существеннее чем докторA majority of youngsters have faced a professional's choice , making this question (is acute to considers) Перевожу первое предложения
большинство молодых людей сталкиваются с профессиональным выбором, (это делает) делая этот вопрос актуальным для того чтобы рассмотреть.
Some people claim that the profession of a doctor is more essential than the profession of an inventor. probably, I agree with the opposite point of view, a creative person on a large scale yields benefits than a doctor in peaceful countries, however, the profession of a doctor is of great importance.
Как-то не уверена с on a large scale И не уверена что мое предложения верно I agree with the opposite point of view, a creative person in large measure yields benefits than a doctor in peaceful countries
Как-то сложно. Может не использовать in large scale вообще. Написать что-то типа
inventer benefits overweight doctor benefits in any society.
Не уверена Спасибо -
# vilidator
Это тоже не красиво inventer benefits overweight doctor benefits in any society.
И совсем не то Может так
An inventer brings more benefits in any society rather than a doctor. -
# Vera
How can we benefit those who most need our help?Benefit smb or smth.
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# Vera
Или to bring benefits to smb, smth
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# vilidator
benefits для society
An inventer brings more benefits in any society rather than a doctor. -
# Vera
Making this topic of current interest